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BBC writers room

BBC writers room:

What do they do: Responsive, proactive and an open door to writers, BBC writersoom is always looking at new ways to find and champion talent for all BBC platforms.

We know how hard it is to be a writer and we believe in finding ways to inspire and inform you, to keep you across changes, giving you access to commissioners and production departments but most importantly to the skills and and experience of established writers.

Aims/ objectives: We are not here for the short term, we understand how long it can take for a writer to find that first and second commission, but if we think you have talent then we will do everything in our power to support and develop you for the long term

 

 TV listing:

 

As you can see there is new tricks and the poison tree on at the same time and also, not drama related but still important, there is also never mind the buzzcocks and 8 out of 10 cats on at the same time.

Scripts and dramas:

The secret of Crickley hall:

 

 

 

 

New tricks:

 

Drama viewing figures:

Silent witness questions:

In the opening scene of this episode called choices we see Modest, the nightclub owner, in the car with his fiancé Helen to whom he has recently become engaged to. They both then step out of the car, Modest goes one way and Helen goes to talk to Modest’s sister Simone outside the nightclub. A car then drives by and starts to shoot a sub machine gun at the club from one of the windows. Everyone outside the nightclub panics and tries to get down but inevitably people are killed. A man is shot in the back as he attempts to run away and Helen is shot and killed which we find out later on was actually an accidental shot fired from Modest as he pulls his own gun out to return fire he puts too much pressure on the trigger, the bullet hits the floor, ricochets and kills Helen.

For this programme I personally feel that, based on the fact it is a drama, it primarily targets middle class women aged between 35 and 55 but due to the crime thriller element of this programme is drags the primary genre more towards the middle allowing men to enjoy it just as much as women. As a secondary audience I would think that it would be for the elder age ground for around 55-70. The reason that I have chosen an older age group as the secondary audience as oppose to the younger age group is because I feel that few teenagers or young adults would take time out to regularly watch and follow the episodes and therefore this programme should really be aimed at the middle aged/ older audience.

In this episode I really did enjoy the fact that as they try to solve the crime they uncover more and more information which takes the team on different routes like the branches of a tree unfolding and then that information allowing them to solve the crime by solving other smaller puzzles along the way. I would try to include a similar story line such as this in my own screenplay as it engages the audience and keeps their interest.

The one thing I disliked about the episode is how clunky and unsatisfying the dialogue was. I’m not sure as to whether this was down to the physical scripting of the episode or if it was down to the delivery of the lines but I didn’t believe the dialogue at all and this took away from the characters and stopped me from enjoying the programme as well as I could. I would definitely avoid awkward dialogue in my own screenplay as it distracts the audience and also lets the storyline down.

Edge of Darkness questions:

In the opening scene we see a train go past in the middle of the night with some sort of important containers on, most probably critical to the storyline later on. We then see three people talking in an almost empty room with many chairs laid out. The three men then leave the room, get in separate cars and are driven away by police officers so it’s clear that these three men are also policemen. We then see Emma Craven in a room of people which seem to be some sort of group. The meeting then ends and Emma is picked up by her dad, Ronald Craven. They arrive home and get out of the car to go indoors where they are met by an armed man who says “Craven bastard” he then aims a gun but Emma steps forward and shouts “don’t” she is then shot, Ronald then holds Emma as she is dying and in her final breath says “don’t tell”.

The primary audience for this programme would probably be males and females aged between 30-50. This is because this programme needs an audience

Script Proposal

                                  

The name for my proposed script is called Amnesia. It follows the story of an 18 year old boy called Luke stone who one day wakes up in hospital surrounded by, what he thinks, are his family and remembers nothing from the events before. Luke soon comes to realize all is not as it seems and he is left betrayed and alone. He learns that he is a sleeper agent trained by the British government to fight against the opposing, power hungry corporation who threaten to over throw the government. Eventually he becomes stuck in the middle of them both and must choose which side to stand on.

The genre for Amnesia will be an action drama the reason i decided to chose this because it appeals to wide range of people. My primary target audience will be working and middle class males and females aged between 16-25 the reason for this is because the action and drama within Amnesia will be aimed at a teenage to young adult audience. The secondary audience will be working and middle class males and females aged between 25-30 the reason for this is because some people may still be interested in the story and genre but due to how the genre is targeted some of the older views may lose interest. As well is drawing in a large part of the teenage audience i feel that this particular television series has a very unique selling point in which that it is a British made, high concept television series made for both the female and male audience.

By creating this television series i hope to create an exciting, new and clever narrative that will always keep the audience on their toes and making them ask "what happens next?" i want to create a fresh story and impress the audience.

When writing the story i would like to keep a lot of naturalistic dialogue to make the whole production seem smooth however it is sometimes the case that when watching a film or television series sometimes the naturalistic dialogue seems clunky and awkward that is why i would mix naturalistic dialogue with non-naturalistic to allow the audience to listen to the production easily without being thrown off by certain phrases or word patterns.

The main character for this script is Luke Stone. He is a sleeper agent trained by the government and fights along side them to take down the oppressing corporation. He has no recollection of who he is or what hes capable of and continues on to find out who he really is and the story behind his life. I see the character of Luke to be an 18 year old quiet boy at first who, after learning what he is capable of, becomes a lot more confident and cocky in his attitude towards the world almost like Peter Parker from the spider man franchise.

Another main character is Christopher Grey. He is the head of the oppressing organization that threaten to take over the government. He is a middle aged man around 40 years old, his main goal is to direct the organization to gain power over all political figures and infiltrate the British government in hope of taking them down.

script synopsis

Luke Stone wakes up in a hospital bed from a coma surrounded by what he thinks are strangers. They explain to Luke that they are his family and after a little conversation and question asking Luke goes home with his family. A few days go past as normal other than a few strange occurrences that Luke notices. When Luke is a college on the second day he is being bullied traditionally for being new. Throughout the day the Bully known as Jake Simmons pushes Luke to his limits by barging him in the corridor, throwing objects at him and generally physically and vocally abusing him. On his way out of college Luke is tripped up by the Jake but this time Luke stands up to confront him. The two boys have an argument which eventually results in Jake punching Luke in the face, knocking him to the ground. Luke stands up again with a cut lip and prepares to take another punch but as Jake goes to swing at Luke he blocks it, counters and knocks Jake to the ground with a combination of impressive combat manoeuvres without Luke having any knowledge of how or what just happend. A teacher at the college then bursts through the crowd and shouts at Luke to get inside. Luke’s parents are called which results in a conversation with the teacher and Luke being taken home and sent up to his room. Luke is sat on the end of his bed when suddenly two armed men burst into his room and drag him downstairs with his parents just watching the events unfold. A bag is then put over Luke’s head as he is transported to a different location. When the bag is pulled from his head Luke finds himself  tied to a chair with a man stood in front of him in a suit. The man asks Luke many questions that he simply cannot answer eventually the man walks away and orders the two armed men to kill Luke. In retaliation Luke breaks free from his chair and takes down the two men without even knowing how he has done it. He then runs out of the room into the streets and begins to sprint as far as he possibly can but he is disturbed by police sirens. Multiple police cars then pull up either side of him, Luke gives up and gets on the ground with his hands behind his head, ending the first episode.